This very intimacy makes them blind to the things the reader sees immediately.
I put out the 1st scene of Distortion, "Street Noise", for a writers critique. It was quite illuminating. I chose not to take it personally but learn from each point. Some things I agreed with, some I didn't. Some were clear craft mistakes while others were stylistic choices I could take or leave.
I have a feeling that my re-write will be so much better due to this experience. I also found a critique buddy (Hey Ashleigh!) who I can work with as I go through re-writes.
Distortion Scene 1 "Street Noise" can be read in its current form (as of today) in the second draft on my It's Author Fun website (here). That was you can see what the original looks like if you'd like to read it before you read the critiques.
Here was the feedback:
- Crit 1 (Summary Crit)
- Crit 2 (Line by line crit)
- Crit 3 (Line by line crit)
- Crit 4 (Line by line crit)
- Crit 5 (Line by line crit)